Now I very much want to see how Harry can take on the repercussions of his own subconscious actions.
I'm very glad you enjoyed this! And yes, there will be definite repercussions in the next fic or two with Subconscious Harry's actions. :D
Needless to say I sympathized with Harry pretty empathetically. Hah.
Holy cow, really? I'm sorry you ended up sleepy and disoriented. :(
The scene were Harry was finally faced down the Not-Bob was delicious to imagine. Damn, how it made me wish we could really see that scene with Terry Mann.
I kinda wish that it really could've happened in canon -- it actually got slashier than I expected it too, right there, but I'm very glad it worked for you.
Also in the ending it was great seeing/hearing Harry reasoning with himself.
I figured that Harry needed that reasoning, and that he'd end up leaving instead of facing things because he's had twenty years of habit of hiding this. He won't want to talk about it suddenly, after his subconscious outs him.
There were a few things that were slightly confusing. Some parts were just a bit long and I kept wondering what time of day it was, although, yeah, that does go with the general mixed-up feel/mental state in the story, both Harry's and my own.
Meeeep. :( I'm sorry for the disorientation there. To be honest, I got a bit confused myself with what time it was during the day, and what day it was. I end up losing track of what time Harry is doing what when, especially in the books, and I think it ended up being not as well-organized as I should've made it. I can deal with it in the context of this fic, because Harry's disoriented and off-balance a lot of the time, and he doesn't have a solid idea of what's going on until the end, but it feels wrong to excuse it because I should've tried to fix it. :(
It occurred to me to wonder when exactly Bob had been his own self in chapters 2 and 3 and when he was not. It left one a bit rattled to not knowing when the snark or argument or feeling had been real in retrospect, though I'm sure you meant the buzzing as a hint towards this; the one clue that the Manipulated!Harry managed to miss all the way through somehow, and Bob was just mostly his own self, yes?
I'll definitely admit that a lot of that is my fault. Initially, I wanted it to be something the reader wasn't sure about, so that when the reader realized that Harry had been talking with his culprit the whole time, it would be a WHAM realization, but then my beta-readers pointed out, "Hey, that's not real!Bob!" so I went along with, "Okay, the readers know who's who," and ended up adjusting my writing midstream. I should've tried to go back and make things more obvious, but part of me wanted to post the sucker when my betas okayed it, and I got antsy. It's been a while since I've posted something this long (and I think this is my longest fic to date?), so there was the anticipation factor of in-depth, well-pondered comments ilke these, which ended up outweighing the desire to cover all of my bases and deliver flawless stuff. Sorry for the quality suffering on that aspect, but thank you for pointing it out to me constructively.
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I'm very glad you enjoyed this! And yes, there will be definite repercussions in the next fic or two with Subconscious Harry's actions. :D
Needless to say I sympathized with Harry pretty empathetically. Hah.
Holy cow, really? I'm sorry you ended up sleepy and disoriented. :(
The scene were Harry was finally faced down the Not-Bob was delicious to imagine. Damn, how it made me wish we could really see that scene with Terry Mann.
I kinda wish that it really could've happened in canon -- it actually got slashier than I expected it too, right there, but I'm very glad it worked for you.
Also in the ending it was great seeing/hearing Harry reasoning with himself.
I figured that Harry needed that reasoning, and that he'd end up leaving instead of facing things because he's had twenty years of habit of hiding this. He won't want to talk about it suddenly, after his subconscious outs him.
There were a few things that were slightly confusing. Some parts were just a bit long and I kept wondering what time of day it was, although, yeah, that does go with the general mixed-up feel/mental state in the story, both Harry's and my own.
Meeeep. :( I'm sorry for the disorientation there. To be honest, I got a bit confused myself with what time it was during the day, and what day it was. I end up losing track of what time Harry is doing what when, especially in the books, and I think it ended up being not as well-organized as I should've made it. I can deal with it in the context of this fic, because Harry's disoriented and off-balance a lot of the time, and he doesn't have a solid idea of what's going on until the end, but it feels wrong to excuse it because I should've tried to fix it. :(
It occurred to me to wonder when exactly Bob had been his own self in chapters 2 and 3 and when he was not. It left one a bit rattled to not knowing when the snark or argument or feeling had been real in retrospect, though I'm sure you meant the buzzing as a hint towards this; the one clue that the Manipulated!Harry managed to miss all the way through somehow, and Bob was just mostly his own self, yes?
I'll definitely admit that a lot of that is my fault. Initially, I wanted it to be something the reader wasn't sure about, so that when the reader realized that Harry had been talking with his culprit the whole time, it would be a WHAM realization, but then my beta-readers pointed out, "Hey, that's not real!Bob!" so I went along with, "Okay, the readers know who's who," and ended up adjusting my writing midstream. I should've tried to go back and make things more obvious, but part of me wanted to post the sucker when my betas okayed it, and I got antsy. It's been a while since I've posted something this long (and I think this is my longest fic to date?), so there was the anticipation factor of in-depth, well-pondered comments ilke these, which ended up outweighing the desire to cover all of my bases and deliver flawless stuff. Sorry for the quality suffering on that aspect, but thank you for pointing it out to me constructively.
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