Oh my.. That was just wildly epic. So exhilarating! XD Those mental images of Harry's subconsciousness were such good fun. Felt like a sudden cross between Narnia and a Michel Gondry film. Or maybe Kevin Smith. And the romance novel cover? Priceless. It was way too corny, too silly and oh, that it was sweet. And very vivid, I might add. Even after all the lightsabersswords, roaring serpents, Spock-beards and swishing robes.. Now I very much want to see how Harry can take on the repercussions of his own subconscious actions.
After that slower, calm pace in the first three parts riddled with disorientation, attempts to sleep and new murder victims, the escalated finale was really quite shocking. And to highlight that effect, I was actually myself dead tired while reading this, having gotten my sleeping patterns all screwy lately.. Needless to say I sympathized with Harry pretty empathetically. Hah. The scene were Harry was finally faced down the Not-Bob was delicious to imagine. Damn, how it made me wish we could really see that scene with Terry Mann. Also in the ending it was great seeing/hearing Harry reasoning with himself.
There were a few things that were slightly confusing. Some parts were just a bit long and I kept wondering what time of day it was, although, yeah, that does go with the general mixed-up feel/mental state in the story, both Harry's and my own. It occurred to me to wonder when exactly Bob had been his own self in chapters 2 and 3 and when he was not. It left one a bit rattled to not knowing when the snark or argument or feeling had been real in retrospect, though I'm sure you meant the buzzing as a hint towards this; the one clue that the Manipulated!Harry managed to miss all the way through somehow, and Bob was just mostly his own self, yes? But it left one wondering.. (Or maybe just vainly hoping that Bob wouldn't really want to leave Harry flat, poor old Harry.. ;) And hey, bit of a cliffy ending there. What's going to happen to our men? Oh, the suspence is bad..
Ok. Two silly, uninteresting sidenotes (that are both just due to my subconscious playing tricks but..) in ch. 2 when Bob's explaining how he'd enjoy returning to his hermit's life and says "No one else to bother me.." I just kept on hearing the "Broadway Musicals of the 1940s.. No roommate to bother me. How can it get any better than this?" from the 'If you were gay' song that some sneaky soul edited to Bob/Harry on YT, you know the one. I couldn't help cracking up. Tiredness, I suppose. The other was "It's a simple thing to nudge someone, to use their own fears against them." by Not-Bob in ch.4 and was promptly hearing the Joker's "Y'see, madness, as you know, is like gravity. All it takes is a little...push." so yeah, I'm sure you didn't mean that, yes? Mind just associates things twistedly. 9_9
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Date: 2008-08-24 06:38 pm (UTC)sabersswords, roaring serpents, Spock-beards and swishing robes.. Now I very much want to see how Harry can take on the repercussions of his own subconscious actions.After that slower, calm pace in the first three parts riddled with disorientation, attempts to sleep and new murder victims, the escalated finale was really quite shocking. And to highlight that effect, I was actually myself dead tired while reading this, having gotten my sleeping patterns all screwy lately.. Needless to say I sympathized with Harry pretty empathetically. Hah.
The scene were Harry was finally faced down the Not-Bob was delicious to imagine. Damn, how it made me wish we could really see that scene with Terry Mann. Also in the ending it was great seeing/hearing Harry reasoning with himself.
There were a few things that were slightly confusing. Some parts were just a bit long and I kept wondering what time of day it was, although, yeah, that does go with the general mixed-up feel/mental state in the story, both Harry's and my own. It occurred to me to wonder when exactly Bob had been his own self in chapters 2 and 3 and when he was not. It left one a bit rattled to not knowing when the snark or argument or feeling had been real in retrospect, though I'm sure you meant the buzzing as a hint towards this; the one clue that the Manipulated!Harry managed to miss all the way through somehow, and Bob was just mostly his own self, yes? But it left one wondering.. (Or maybe just vainly hoping that Bob wouldn't really want to leave Harry flat, poor old Harry.. ;)
And hey, bit of a cliffy ending there. What's going to happen to our men? Oh, the suspence is bad..
Ok. Two silly, uninteresting sidenotes (that are both just due to my subconscious playing tricks but..) in ch. 2 when Bob's explaining how he'd enjoy returning to his hermit's life and says "No one else to bother me.." I just kept on hearing the "Broadway Musicals of the 1940s.. No roommate to bother me. How can it get any better than this?" from the 'If you were gay' song that some sneaky soul edited to Bob/Harry on YT, you know the one. I couldn't help cracking up. Tiredness, I suppose.
The other was "It's a simple thing to nudge someone, to use their own fears against them." by Not-Bob in ch.4 and was promptly hearing the Joker's "Y'see, madness, as you know, is like gravity. All it takes is a little...push." so yeah, I'm sure you didn't mean that, yes? Mind just associates things twistedly. 9_9
Thanks for writing! Very addictive/enjoyable! ^_^